Haikus for the Senses

20 Nov

Sound

The raven calls
His great wings flapping
up silent streets

One Deep Breath posed a challenge this week for the senses. This image has been dreamlike in my skull since I saw it a week or so ago. Looking out my bathroom window, I heard a raven call and then it flew past in the fog — it’s wings moving the air. A moment later its mate followed again with a call and then the wings flapping the air. Maybe this one should have been a haibun to really convey what I wanted to say. Nevertheless, the haiku is good. I’ll have to think of some other senses haikus before the end of the week and add them.

My poetry can be found here.

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7 Responses to “Haikus for the Senses”

  1. Roswila 21 November, 2006 at 4:24 am #

    Wonderful ‘ku. Clear image, very evocative.

  2. Crafty Green Poet 21 November, 2006 at 8:47 am #

    Ravens are such magnificent birds. I love the fact that other than the raven the street is silent. Very evocative.

  3. -llm. 21 November, 2006 at 2:48 pm #

    Thank you for your comments! I appreciate the reading and the support.

  4. Sandy 21 November, 2006 at 10:34 pm #

    I like this very much. Crows and ravens are special to me, and it sounds like they might be to you, too.

  5. Anonymous 22 November, 2006 at 12:40 am #

    Beautiful haiku! I wanted to call it evocative, but that’s been said.

  6. jzr 22 November, 2006 at 12:54 am #

    Wonderful!

  7. cloudscome 23 November, 2006 at 2:59 pm #

    I love this. Good image!

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