Temperature Temper Tantrum

14 Jul

hot, sticky, temper
the temperature goes up
the heat annoys me

I have read about people who enjoy the heat, who sink into it, and fully relax.  I am not one of those people.  I cannot cope well in hot weather.  Small decisions are beyond me.  Little details slip away from me.  The heat annoys me.

hot, languid, lifeless
each leaf wilts before the heat
the water is hot

My favorite time of each day is when I water the garden.  When temperatures sore to over 100, the black coil of hose becomes an efficient solar water heater.  If I were washing my dishes, I’d be pleased but scalding my plants will not help them to recover from the heat.  The heat annoys me.

smoke clogs the clear sky
brown, ash-filled air clogs my lungs
I long for cool fog

I live near the coast.  Soon, the weather will change and the cool, damp fog will reclaim its right to march up into these mountains bringing fog needed by redwood trees, my garden, and the fire-fighters alike.  We wait for that.  Some wait calmly.  I wait with growing impatience.  The heat annoys me.


Haibun is an ancient type of poetry combining haiku and prose.  This haibun was written in answer to a prompt from read write poem.
More heat-induced tantrums poems can be found at read write poem.
All content written by Liza Lee Miller unless otherwise noted.
© 2008, Liza Lee Miller. Creative Commons License


9 Responses to “Temperature Temper Tantrum”

  1. robin andrea 14 July, 2008 at 7:41 am #

    I am not a hot-weather person either. Can’t tolerate it. I hope that cooling fog comes in soon for you.

  2. lirone 14 July, 2008 at 7:43 am #

    Interesting use of the form… must give this one a try! I like the way the repetition of “the heat annoys me” builds up the intensity of the annoyance.

  3. polkadotwitch 14 July, 2008 at 8:46 am #

    thanks for playing along and providing me with some poetic ways to rage against the summer heat!

  4. browneyedgirl65 14 July, 2008 at 10:14 am #

    i really like how this mixed format form comes off.

    i really recommend mojitos for this kind of weather, btw 😉

  5. nathan1313 14 July, 2008 at 3:16 pm #

    I’ve never seen this form before. I like what you do with it, the balance of two voices. “I long for cool fog.” the vowels in this sound like relief from the heat.

  6. Sweet Talking Guy.. 15 July, 2008 at 7:32 am #

    Yeah, I like the format of this, the mixture of prose and poem (haiku) works well.

  7. Crafty Green Poet 15 July, 2008 at 10:19 am #

    I like haibun and this one works really well, I like your use of repitition

  8. Mary 15 July, 2008 at 2:33 pm #

    I’m with you Sister. I hate the heat. I am found outdoors after 7pm watering the water, like you. You write beautifully! I love this post.

  9. pieceofpie 16 July, 2008 at 3:40 pm #

    ah heat… dry heat, wet heat… its all icky sticky… love your format… brings out the words in the poems all the more…

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